一个好的英语作文需要注意以下几个方面：
1. 明确写作目的和身份：在写作前，需要先了解作文的主题、目的和写作身份，这有助于你理清思路和确立文章框架。
2. 精选素材和整理思路：收集相关素材并整理思路是撰写好英语作文的前提。可以在读题阶段或构思文章时准备一些例子、实践经验、回忆、故事、新闻等素材，为文章增色添彩。
3. 牢牢把握语法和单词拼写：作为写作者，需要具备基本的语法知识、良好的单词拼写能力和准确的标点使用等能力，这是写作的基础。在写作过程中，可以利用正确的语法和词汇表达来增加文章的专业度和魅力。
4. 确定文章结构和重点：在写作时，需要按照逻辑层次和思路结构确定文章的分段和篇章。可以从引言、主体和结论三个方面入手，重点突出并且要具有可读性。
5. 多读多写，反思总结提高：提高英语作文水平的最好方法就是多读，多模仿优秀的英语作文，然后落实到自己的写作中，并及时反思总结、发现问题，不断改进和提高。
总之，英语作文需要有清晰的结构安排和想法逻辑，语言表达要准确、地道和通顺。多读英文原版著作，培养拓展英语思维的能力，同时相应提高写作水平，加强词汇积累，也是提高英语作文质量的一种有效方式。
well your english is pretty good! below is the corrected composition
The pictures present a very familiar sightin modern society：In the first picture of 30 years ago, a pretty young mother leadsher lovely little daughter hand in hand and walks down the street. In thesecond picture, nowadays, the elderly mother is supported by her daughter’sfirm arm, with a **ile on her face. And below these drawings, there is a topic:supporting each other.
Obviously, the real purpose ofthe artist is not the pictures itself, but to lead us to find what hides behindthem， that is, parents and children should support each other.Firstly, for many *****s, they received nearly all of their parents’ love and carewhen they were little boys or girls. About 87% of the parents said that they spentmost of their time and paid attention on their sons or daughters, according toa recent survey reported by the Oct.28 issue of Reader’s Digest. Second, it isa traditional virtue for Chinese to respect the aged and care for the young.
To sum up, much attentionshould be paid to the supporting between parents and children. My attitude isthat when we were young, our parent cared for and helped us as much as they can.Now, it is time for us to return them. Such as, we could help our mother dohouseworks. Although some of the Chinese traditional virtue are determining,one tradition that should be never faded away is that of taking care of theelderly.
it goes without saying that the cartoon aims at revealing a common and serious pheonmenon in our society : with the rapid development of internet,We choose it as the only tool to communicate with others and don't want to do the samething in the reality .Therefore ,We live much closer than anytime before yet the distance inside of us further long than anytime before too.
首先 你写的是卡通 后面怎么会提到上网沟通呢？作文里面的大问题没有，就是不知道你到底注重表达什么主题，如果是写卡通的好坏，可以说它能够开发我们的想象力，给我们欢乐，创造没有的生物，表达奇幻的思想，但是，卡通毕竟是假的，过分的沉迷也不好的，还有现在有点卡通片会教坏小朋友之类的~ 如果你是写网络使人们的交流变多还是变少，那个问题直接可以搜出来的，网上很多的~ 需要的话，我还可以发一份给你~
I don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying at school. ( at school比in school更常见，因为school不是一个大地点，所以用at。如果是一个大地点，例如一个城市，我们说in)
However, if I don't study, I won't have a good mark. (写作时，however比but更为正式。But更偏向口语）
I must study very hard, although I don't like it.
Sometimes I want to have some fun, so I don't study hard. （中文说“有时我想玩”，但是英文却不是用Play来解释的，英语里说have fun.如果说i want to have fun,就是我想要找点乐趣，也就近乎与“玩”了）
My parents are a bit worried about me, and they always urge me, "Don't watch TV and don't go online! You must study!" (这里你也可以说they always say to me, 不过我觉得Urge是“劝”，可能更有那种你想表达的意思）
I appreciate that they help me so much（thank是一个动词(有时也做名词），所以应该是i thank...he thanks，不过即使你用了i thank them,这种表达也是几乎没人说的。有一种可以是，i thank them for helping me so much.但是我觉得thank them，听起来多多少少别扭。所以你可以用一个更高级的词，appreciate,感激。还有一个问题就是，they help me more.如果前面你有提到他们帮主你什么，你可以说more，这里只要说很多就可以了。)
They love me, I know.
I always talk to myself, (跟谁说话的时候，可以说talk to someone,talk with someone，但是talk with someone是和一个人说话，当你想表达“对自己说”的时候=talk to myself) and promise myself that i must do well. (不要前面用现代时，后面用过去时。前面说talk to myself,又说say to myself太过重复。所以换成Promise）
But I can't stick to my promise for many days or even months.
Maybe this is why I don't usually get a good mark.
（it's about why...如果你换成this is why...强调性会更强）
(写好作文的一个因素就是，一个词不要一直重复着用。你可以换换别的词。你这里用了很多的always,其实代替always的，还有often,usually,frequently等等。你可以换一换。一种意思用很多方法说，才可以避免重复）